I had to go collect my deposit back from the con artists who wanted to bilk me on the car. Stupid cowboy con artists. Bah humbug on your behalf.
I wanted to explore the aftermath of the shtriga without being able to get directly into either John's or Dean's heads. That really works for me, staying out of their heads - catching a glimpse of the aftermath without getting sucked into the actual thoughts of the characters, because it would be too easy to get bogged down in there. In the same way that Ghostfacers worked for me as a means of gaining a bit of distance after a series of really intense events, just giving us enough of a hint on how the characters are coping without having to get all caught up in the aftermath and immediate reactions, and all that. Your outsider's rather troubled POV has the same effect, especially since she really can't make the family out at all, is fascinated by them, knows that they aren't right, but can't make up her mind if that is good, bad, or just them. That felt very real.
And I kinda like where the boys are at in the Now sections, as well - they were in such a weird place with each other at the start of S3, putting on a show of normality while struggling to deal with all that had happened and was going to happen. That comes across well in the story.
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Date: 2008-07-02 05:44 am (UTC)Stupid cowboy con artists. Bah humbug on your behalf.
I wanted to explore the aftermath of the shtriga without being able to get directly into either John's or Dean's heads.
That really works for me, staying out of their heads - catching a glimpse of the aftermath without getting sucked into the actual thoughts of the characters, because it would be too easy to get bogged down in there. In the same way that Ghostfacers worked for me as a means of gaining a bit of distance after a series of really intense events, just giving us enough of a hint on how the characters are coping without having to get all caught up in the aftermath and immediate reactions, and all that. Your outsider's rather troubled POV has the same effect, especially since she really can't make the family out at all, is fascinated by them, knows that they aren't right, but can't make up her mind if that is good, bad, or just them. That felt very real.
And I kinda like where the boys are at in the Now sections, as well - they were in such a weird place with each other at the start of S3, putting on a show of normality while struggling to deal with all that had happened and was going to happen. That comes across well in the story.