That was really excellent, dude. Nice pacing, interestingly told with some great prose. I really enjoyed it. I liked the balance of supernatural vs run-of-the-mill whack jobs too. At times it was like reading a hostage situation in a school and then you remember there's a supernatural element to this. Great! John would make a pretty good action hero. Forget your Bruce Willis' and Arnie's of the world. Papa Winchester would kick some ass. Good job.